Potomac's eighth grade English students read and discuss The House on Mango Street by Sandra Cisneros. The book is a series of short vignettes that together capture the characters, setting, and stories of a particular neighborhood in Chicago. The vignettes are written from the perspective of a fictional narrator and are based loosely on Cisneros's own experiences as well as those of her students. Some of the vignettes are humorous or action-packed; some are heart-wrenching or shocking. All are deliberate in their use of figurative language, poetic elements, grammar conventions, and pacing.

Each eighth grader composed at least one vignette for inclusion in this digital collection. They wrote in the style of Sandra Cisneros, as they interpreted it based on their notes and our class discussions, yet they set it in a time and place of their own choosing. While some of these vignettes are based on the author's personal experience, many of them are purely fiction, an imagining of characters and circumstances that seemed ripe for this assignment. Students also used this assignment to experiment with new vocabulary words and techniques involving punctuation and sentence structure.

We encourage you to leave comments below vignettes that strike you in some way. Please keep your comments positive and specific; this is not the place for critiques or suggestions. Enjoy the creativity and vibrancy of these students' literary efforts.

Thursday, December 17, 2015

Stitches in the Dark

It was February 6th, 2010. The same day as the huge snowstorm. Snowmageddon.

Our next door neighbors came over for dinner after a extremely fun-and snowy-snow day. There are five people in our neighbors family: a Mom and Dad, Caitlin and Daniel, who are both older than me, and Andrew and Brendan, who are my age. Daniel had a friend named Peter over that day, so we decided it would be fun to have him over also. The funny thing was that Daniel was a huge extrovert, but Peter was an introvert, but they still ended up getting along very well.

Peter, Daniel, Andrew, Brendan and I were all in the basement running around and playing tag. Suddenly, Daniel decided that it would be fun to play ball tag with the lights off. Daniel explained what ball tag was to us, and we were exhilarated because it sounded like so much fun-it wasn’t.

So we turned the lights off and Daniel started with the ball. I crawled to the back corner of the basement because I was scared of the dark. All I heard was a bunch of screaming and the crashing of the ball hitting the walls. I got really scared and started crawling back to the stairs to get upstairs. To do this, I had to crawl around the corner where the game was taking place.

As soon as I thought I had passed the corner, I suddenly felt a huge push at my side and I felt my head smack straight into the wall. I couldn’t feel any pain, but for some reason I started crying and flailing on the ground. They turned the lights back on once they heard me, and I could hear them saying things like “Oh, my god” and “Holy sh*t!” I was wondering what had happened to me that would make them say things like that, until I looked in the mirror.

I had a huge stream of blood that was coming down from the top of my forehead that was almost covering my eye entirely. I started freaking out and Daniel had to carry me upstairs to the parents. They set me down in a chair and used ice packs and paper towels to try and stop the bleeding. We were wondering if I had to go to the hospital or not. I was terrified of the hospital, so I was trying to convince my parents that I was alright. We ended up having to drive to the hospital during the huge snowstorm get stitches in my head.

As soon as we got to the hospital, we were rushed to the emergency room where they immediately laid me down and stuck a numbing needle in my forehead. I started screaming and my mom let me squeeze her hand while they were giving me the stitches.

Every time we hit a bump on the drive back, I got a shock of pain from my head, so my dad had to drive really slowly.

Once we got home, we checked in the basement to see if any damage had been done. We didn’t see anything until we turned the corner where I hit my head. There was a ginormous hole in the wall, and blood stains were all over the carpet.

~ Nick S.

7 comments:

  1. I like the detail you used for your actions and how you describe the basement in a very specific way.

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  2. I liked how you made me feel like I was in the story. - Jack Stering

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  3. I really like all the detail from your story. You really helped the reader feel the setting from the dark basement to the cold outside.
    -Martin

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  4. This was very good, once you wrote you were going to play ball tag in the dark I knew something terrible was going to happen.

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  5. I like how you mentioned how you feel during the story, how you were scared of the dark and hospitals. It made the reader get into your shoes a little bit more.

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  6. I really like your title

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  7. I like how you described the family and peter, and how afraid you were of playing the game

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