When I was a few months older, I sat in my bouncy chair and they would come up to me full of kisses. The Good Dog would go fetch my blankets and stuffed animals; he was my favorite of the three dogs.
Years later, the dogs would still fight over food; they snapped at each other and wrestled in our muddy, untamed backyard. Even in their old age, the two dogs we had left still stayed active and ferocious. Without the Good Dog, most days were mayhem.
The two always thought they were bigger than they actually were, and nothing could knock them down. I remember trying to move the Soft Dog from my parents’ bed so that I could lay down. She growled at me, and I ran away.
Sometime later, we only had one dog to hold close. The back door was peeling and spotted from the Excited Dog getting scared of the car alarm, or of a thunderstorm. Jumping up and down, creating a sporadic percussion with her beautiful doe eyes bulging and her fur matted in places. There was a time when I found her sequestered in my closet, scared. And I sat down with her because I was scared too.
~ Kate N.
This had so much detail and hooked the reader so they were interested.
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I like the way you named the dogs based on their personalities. I also liked how even though the protagonist was scared of the dogs, she still sat with one of them because the dog was scared and needed comforting.
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Your vignette is very descriptive, and I liked the good use of vocab words!!:)))) ot
ReplyDeleteYour descriptions were good throughout. I really liked the description at the beginning of the three dogs.
ReplyDeleteYou were very descriptive throughout the whole piece. I enjoyed how you related the dog's names to their personalities.
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I really liked how detailed you were, I felt like I was there with you.
ReplyDeleteI love how you refer to the dogs as the good dog or the excited dog in your writing!
ReplyDeleteThe detail you use really adds to the quality to your story and I like how you give your dogs adjectives as names.
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