Potomac's eighth grade English students read and discuss The House on Mango Street by Sandra Cisneros. The book is a series of short vignettes that together capture the characters, setting, and stories of a particular neighborhood in Chicago. The vignettes are written from the perspective of a fictional narrator and are based loosely on Cisneros's own experiences as well as those of her students. Some of the vignettes are humorous or action-packed; some are heart-wrenching or shocking. All are deliberate in their use of figurative language, poetic elements, grammar conventions, and pacing.

Each eighth grader composed at least one vignette for inclusion in this digital collection. They wrote in the style of Sandra Cisneros, as they interpreted it based on their notes and our class discussions, yet they set it in a time and place of their own choosing. While some of these vignettes are based on the author's personal experience, many of them are purely fiction, an imagining of characters and circumstances that seemed ripe for this assignment. Students also used this assignment to experiment with new vocabulary words and techniques involving punctuation and sentence structure.

We encourage you to leave comments below vignettes that strike you in some way. Please keep your comments positive and specific; this is not the place for critiques or suggestions. Enjoy the creativity and vibrancy of these students' literary efforts.

Friday, December 18, 2015

Summer Paradise

It was the first month of summer, and we had just flown to Turkey. It was the perfect afternoonthe sun shining, a slight warm breeze, and not a cloud in the sky. I thought it was the perfect time for a swim, while others thought it was a great time to relax by the poolside. I jumped into the pool, letting the crystal clear water surround me. In the meantime, my father and uncle were enjoying a bottle of wine by the poolside. I was living in a summer paradise. Then, a single cloud came and covered the sun, spoiling the perfect picture.

I decided to get out of the pool as the lack of sun caused the weather to become rather chilly. As I was getting out I did not notice that my uncle had placed his wine glass on the deck, but it was too late. I felt something against my shin, and watched as the the glass shattered to the floor. The next few minutes were a blur. I felt no pain, but I could feel something dripping down my leg rapidly. I saw people run towards me: my mom, dad, and grandmother. There were others but I could not make them out because the world was swimming in and out of focus. Someone wrapped a blanket around my leg, the only astringent they could find, and took me to the car. The pain started to kick in and the dizziness got worse. Soon the blanket was soaked in red.

We got to the hospital and I was wheeled to the emergency room. The doctor got a numbing needle the size of small football, and forced it in my leg. The pain slowly began to subside as my leg became numb, and the world finally came into focus again. After the doctor was done I had 30 stitches in my leg, and was inept at walking. Once we got home, I limped to the couch with help from my dad, and my family tried to commiserate about the accident. It was not effective; my summer was ruined. The sun was no longer shining, the warm breeze gone, and the sky dotted with clouds. Summer paradise was long gone.

~ Evrim O.

8 comments:

  1. I really liked it. It was so descriptive that it actually made me feel kind of sad that the character's summer was ruined.

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  2. It was really descriptive. The beginning and end were very good.

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  3. I really enjoyed reading your story. This story was so descriptive that I could create a visual picture in my head. :):):):):):)

    -Lysander

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  4. I feel like the way you ended it made it seem like you had a terrible summer, and the description of the pain was good.

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  5. I remember you telling this story before but the tone you used in the writing made the story come to life.

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  6. Very descriptive; almost tragic. The weather was a good way of showing the shift in the mood.

    AC

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  7. The three paragraphs are so different that it is almost like three vignettes, but you managed to blend them very nicely so that it flows smoothly

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  8. This is so good! The description of the accident is very realistic. I love how the weather and such changes along with the mood of the story.

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