Potomac's eighth grade English students read and discuss The House on Mango Street by Sandra Cisneros. The book is a series of short vignettes that together capture the characters, setting, and stories of a particular neighborhood in Chicago. The vignettes are written from the perspective of a fictional narrator and are based loosely on Cisneros's own experiences as well as those of her students. Some of the vignettes are humorous or action-packed; some are heart-wrenching or shocking. All are deliberate in their use of figurative language, poetic elements, grammar conventions, and pacing.

Each eighth grader composed at least one vignette for inclusion in this digital collection. They wrote in the style of Sandra Cisneros, as they interpreted it based on their notes and our class discussions, yet they set it in a time and place of their own choosing. While some of these vignettes are based on the author's personal experience, many of them are purely fiction, an imagining of characters and circumstances that seemed ripe for this assignment. Students also used this assignment to experiment with new vocabulary words and techniques involving punctuation and sentence structure.

We encourage you to leave comments below vignettes that strike you in some way. Please keep your comments positive and specific; this is not the place for critiques or suggestions. Enjoy the creativity and vibrancy of these students' literary efforts.

Thursday, December 17, 2015

Washed Away

I remember dodging behind a tree. Avoiding the arrows whizzing past my head by an inch. The wind wildly blowing my hair into my face. The stampede of the horses hooves behind me. The overwhelming feeling of the chase. They thought they were chasing me. Was it the other way around?

The hounds barking at me, trying to sniff me out. The roar of the waterfall up ahead. Could I jump? More importantly, would I jump? The moonlight flickering between the tree branches and leaves as I ran towards the cliff's edge. Louder barking. Men laughing. Horses neighing. My quiet panting breaths. The silent crunching of the dry leaves beneath my feet.

The water was beautiful at night. The moonshine reflecting off of the crashing water beneath. What lay in the turmoil? Vicious sea monsters? Or just sand and rocks?

No time to dwell. Hearing the men shout out ‘there she is!’.

One.

Two.

Three.

The rush of the wind as I dropped.

The plunging feeling in my stomach as I fell. Possibly to my own demise.

The numbness I felt as I had struck the water. The scratching it made as the hard surface broke my fall. I had rested on the surface of the water for a moment, and then it shattered. I fell through, the numbness but a distant memory.

I remember forgetting about the men with weapons above. I couldn’t hear them anymore... I hadn’t wanted to hear them anymore. I knew I had to get out of the water;, the growing frosty cold of the moving water hit me.

Yet I wasn’t able to move. I drifted out to sea. No longer caring if the men found me or not. I just floated, bobbing up and down. My body slowly grew colder... colder… colder. Slower... slower. I had become tired all of a sudden, the stamina from the adventure had worn off long ago.

No longer worrying about what lay beneath the unrest ocean.

My eyes closed, the moon disappearing, only a far away memory, out of reach. My breathing slowed.

And then I was washed away in the ocean, letting the darkness drag me away with it.

~ Marie A.

5 comments:

  1. I really liked the form of your vignette. It made the story even more interesting and realistic.

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  2. You made this story very realistic and I really enjoyed reading.
    - MDJ

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  3. very deep? good description. i'm sort of hoping this isn't based on a true story. why men? why not women? women are super strong.

    -kn

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  4. That was sad... and emotional... and powerful... all in good way, so great job!

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  5. That was intense! Overall, wonderful

    AC

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