Potomac's eighth grade English students read and discuss The House on Mango Street by Sandra Cisneros. The book is a series of short vignettes that together capture the characters, setting, and stories of a particular neighborhood in Chicago. The vignettes are written from the perspective of a fictional narrator and are based loosely on Cisneros's own experiences as well as those of her students. Some of the vignettes are humorous or action-packed; some are heart-wrenching or shocking. All are deliberate in their use of figurative language, poetic elements, grammar conventions, and pacing.

Each eighth grader composed at least one vignette for inclusion in this digital collection. They wrote in the style of Sandra Cisneros, as they interpreted it based on their notes and our class discussions, yet they set it in a time and place of their own choosing. While some of these vignettes are based on the author's personal experience, many of them are purely fiction, an imagining of characters and circumstances that seemed ripe for this assignment. Students also used this assignment to experiment with new vocabulary words and techniques involving punctuation and sentence structure.

We encourage you to leave comments below vignettes that strike you in some way. Please keep your comments positive and specific; this is not the place for critiques or suggestions. Enjoy the creativity and vibrancy of these students' literary efforts.

Thursday, December 17, 2015

Told You So

“You’re never going to become black belt,” Miguel told me.

We were red belts at the time, and had been training for only 16 months. But that didn’t keep us from being as aggressive as tigers. Every time our taekwondo master corrected the other in our self-defense or forms, we would smile with glee.

One evening, I walked into the dojang and began to put on my sparring gear. It was a Tuesday, which meant we would be having a sparring class.

“Serena, let me help you,” the master had said, tying the back of my chest guard.

Before I knew it, class had started and we were paired up. Since there weren’t that many girls, I was paired up with Miguel. Again. Sparring with him was tough. He was bigger than me, and technically he should’ve been a high red belt, but because he had broken his arm, he was unable to take the exam. Which brought me to a slight disadvantage.

Miguel tended to kick me in the shins. On “accident.” There wasn’t much padding on our legs, and you were supposed to kick the chest guard, but he didn’t seem to care.

“You don’t get any points for kicking there!” I whispered angrily.

“When you’re in a real fight, it doesn’t matter where you kick,” he had said. “You’ll see.”

These were how many of my classes had been. I was always working hard, in hopes of becoming a better martial artist then him. That had been the only thing that had motivated me.

Then one day he left. Word had gotten around that he had ditched taekwondo for soccer.

You may have thought that I would not have continued to train without his motivation, but instead I trained even harder; this time being competing with myself.

Now I’m almost a 3rd degree black belt. It’s been about three years since Miguel told me I would never become a black belt because I wasn’t good enough.

Now he’s not even here. If he were to show up, he would still be a red belt.

“I told you I would become a black belt.” I whisper. “I told you so.”

~ Mariam S.

7 comments:

  1. I really like how the story builds until the ending, where it brings it back to the beginning with the title.
    -KD

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  2. I love how you use dialogue and what the narrator is thinking in her head to give the reader a better understanding of the story. Great job!
    -Kelsey

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  3. I like the determined attitude during the whole vignette which sets up the foreshadowed victory.

    -Deven

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  4. I like all of the dialogue that you use. It is really good:)

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  5. I'm really interested in these very deep characters you've built. This is not one dementional.

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  7. I like how the story's dialogue hooks the reader in.

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