Potomac's eighth grade English students read and discuss The House on Mango Street by Sandra Cisneros. The book is a series of short vignettes that together capture the characters, setting, and stories of a particular neighborhood in Chicago. The vignettes are written from the perspective of a fictional narrator and are based loosely on Cisneros's own experiences as well as those of her students. Some of the vignettes are humorous or action-packed; some are heart-wrenching or shocking. All are deliberate in their use of figurative language, poetic elements, grammar conventions, and pacing.

Each eighth grader composed at least one vignette for inclusion in this digital collection. They wrote in the style of Sandra Cisneros, as they interpreted it based on their notes and our class discussions, yet they set it in a time and place of their own choosing. While some of these vignettes are based on the author's personal experience, many of them are purely fiction, an imagining of characters and circumstances that seemed ripe for this assignment. Students also used this assignment to experiment with new vocabulary words and techniques involving punctuation and sentence structure.

We encourage you to leave comments below vignettes that strike you in some way. Please keep your comments positive and specific; this is not the place for critiques or suggestions. Enjoy the creativity and vibrancy of these students' literary efforts.

Thursday, December 17, 2015

The Alarm

It was a warm spring day. I was home alone, and my Dad and my brother Josh were at a basketball tournament. My Mom was at a business trip in New Jersey. I had slept in my basement and I had been watching ESPN all morning.

Suddenly, the telephone started to ring. As I got up to get the phone, my house’s burglar alarm went off. I tentatively picked up the receiver.

“Hey, I am on my way home from New Jersey,” announced my Mom.

“Okay, I think Josh and Dad just got home because the alarm went off.”

“They aren't going to be home for a while, that is not them.”

“Then who is it?” I stammered, my heart instinctively beating faster.

“I don't know...but get out of the house,” my Mom replied with absolute terror.

“Where do I go?” I whispered in panic.

“I don't know. Just run.” I grabbed my iPad and I was gone. In my pajamas. With no shoes. I burst out my basement door. Sprinting as fast as my feet could carry me, I raced into the woods. My bare feet scraping along the ground.

At least a mile later, I made it to a friend's house. Feet bloodied and out of breath, I told my friend Max’s parents that my house was being robbed. They let me stay at their house until they were reassured by a phone call from my Mom that it was safe for me to go home.

Max’s parents explained to me that the security network alarm picked up motion in the basement. The only motion in the basement was when I rose from the couch to answer the phone.

To this day, I still blame my Mom for traumatizing me with the simple act of not pressing motion off.

~ Justin F.

10 comments:

  1. Very good. You built a lot of suspense.
    EC

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  2. I liked the suspense you built up and the use of dialogue. SS

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  3. I like how you used the dialogue

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  4. I like how you said that your mom "traumatized" you. Very cool story. CR

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  5. I can totally see you doing this. It seems like something you would do. DA

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  6. This story is hilariously good.

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  7. I like how you built up suspense to get the reader really excited and make them wonder what would happen next. Great plot twist!

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  8. I like how you blended the dialogue to make it more suspenseful.

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  9. I like how the suspense built up to the end of the story. I can imagine how relieved you were.

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