Potomac's eighth grade English students read and discuss The House on Mango Street by Sandra Cisneros. The book is a series of short vignettes that together capture the characters, setting, and stories of a particular neighborhood in Chicago. The vignettes are written from the perspective of a fictional narrator and are based loosely on Cisneros's own experiences as well as those of her students. Some of the vignettes are humorous or action-packed; some are heart-wrenching or shocking. All are deliberate in their use of figurative language, poetic elements, grammar conventions, and pacing.

Each eighth grader composed at least one vignette for inclusion in this digital collection. They wrote in the style of Sandra Cisneros, as they interpreted it based on their notes and our class discussions, yet they set it in a time and place of their own choosing. While some of these vignettes are based on the author's personal experience, many of them are purely fiction, an imagining of characters and circumstances that seemed ripe for this assignment. Students also used this assignment to experiment with new vocabulary words and techniques involving punctuation and sentence structure.

We encourage you to leave comments below vignettes that strike you in some way. Please keep your comments positive and specific; this is not the place for critiques or suggestions. Enjoy the creativity and vibrancy of these students' literary efforts.

Wednesday, December 24, 2014

Nothing Could Go Wrong

It seemed as if nothing could go wrong. The wind blowing against your face. Suddenly changing its mind and swirling in another direction. The soft, puffy, white snow streaming against the thin plastic sheet. It was the perfect day. The sun was shining brighter than it ever had before. Thin strips of sunlight peeking through the windows. You are almost ready. You had watch the snow drift from the sky the night before and you knew it would be perfect. We got out the shovels and dug a path into the crystal clear sky. You stand there waiting by the door. Listening to the sound of snow soaring into the air and falling back down again like parachutes. The tug of a thick string powering a harsh motor. Watching a puff of gasoline rise into the air and vanish. 

It seemed as if nothing could go wrong. The thin air, crisp enough to catch you breath within seconds. You ran to the shed as fast as you could trying to be the first one there. You grabbed your favorite. Lying against the wall was the green circular piece of plastic that was perfect for racing down the slick black pavement. Your sister grabs that old purple one with bright yellow string. The old purple one goes the fastests but never seems to make it too far. You run through the snow and race down the driveway until you reach the perfect spot. 

It seemed as if nothing could go wrong. You and your sister were both ready. You watch as your sister rides down on top of the pavement that shines like the blazing sun. You're ready. You jump in your sled, holding on to the crack in the ice. A huge gust of wind pushes you forward and you're off. Slipping and sliding down the hill. You're about to reach the snowbank. You go flying into the air.

~ Zoe D.

7 comments:

  1. I like how you end the story, it leaves you wondering what happened to the girl. I also enjoy how you give very good examples of the setting, the vibe of getting to sled and how you see the snow.

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  2. I liked how you were very descriptive throughout the story and had really good vocabulary. Your story is really good!

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  3. You were very descriptive. I could taste the snow, and smell the gasoline of the snow-blower.

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  4. I love how you start each paragraph with "It seemed as nothing could go wrong". I also loved how in the first paragraph you used the five senses - touch, smell, sight - it really lets the reader be in the moment with you.

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  5. I like how you used a different viewpoint.You really let the reader have the experience of feeling the movements of the sled

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  6. I like how you leave the readers with a cliff hanger. You were really good at telling a story and the way you repeated words for emphasis was really good.

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  7. WHAT HAPPENED???????????????? I love the cliff hanger, though. I loved the repetition and how gripping it was.

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