They were here now, in the Ritz Carlton of neighborhoods. This wasn’t her. The bubble that the people lived in, the way life status was defined by how many square feet your house was, what color credit card was nestled in your wallet. Personalities were worn as masks, changing day by day, rarely slipping back to reveal the person behind. Sometimes she let herself be like that, but it wasn’t her. This wasn’t who she wanted to be. This wasn’t how she wanted to end up.
She hated masks.
She dreamed of living in a place where a person was defined by more than a tag on a pair of jeans, by more than the worth of their shoe closets. She dreamed of a place without masks. A place where people flaunted the face underneath without an ounce of shame. She wanted to do something influential, something that could change other people's lives for the better. She didn’t need a mask. She wanted to make a difference, not a fortune.
~ Whitney B.
First paragraph's descriptiveness of detail stands out
ReplyDeleteThe short sentences of the first paragraph really intrigued me and made me want to keep reading further
ReplyDeleteI like how you described the personalities as masks. I also liked how you let us know how the main character felt.
ReplyDeleteNice job whitters!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
ReplyDeleteThis is great! Nice writing technique! Is this your grandma? I'm curious who it is.
ReplyDeleteGreat vignette! Probably the best one that I've read.
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