Potomac's eighth grade English students read and discuss The House on Mango Street by Sandra Cisneros. The book is a series of short vignettes that together capture the characters, setting, and stories of a particular neighborhood in Chicago. The vignettes are written from the perspective of a fictional narrator and are based loosely on Cisneros's own experiences as well as those of her students. Some of the vignettes are humorous or action-packed; some are heart-wrenching or shocking. All are deliberate in their use of figurative language, poetic elements, grammar conventions, and pacing.

Each eighth grader composed at least one vignette for inclusion in this digital collection. They wrote in the style of Sandra Cisneros, as they interpreted it based on their notes and our class discussions, yet they set it in a time and place of their own choosing. While some of these vignettes are based on the author's personal experience, many of them are purely fiction, an imagining of characters and circumstances that seemed ripe for this assignment. Students also used this assignment to experiment with new vocabulary words and techniques involving punctuation and sentence structure.

We encourage you to leave comments below vignettes that strike you in some way. Please keep your comments positive and specific; this is not the place for critiques or suggestions. Enjoy the creativity and vibrancy of these students' literary efforts.

Thursday, December 17, 2015

My Finger is NOT a Carrot

AHHHHHHHHHHHH! He bites my finger and the nightmare begins.

A hot summer day in the middle of Texas. A steady wave of heat bears down on my little body. I have just finished playing with the dog and have been asked to help feed the horses. I am so excited! Ever since we got here a few days ago that is all I have wanted to do. My brother’s friend’s sister, Katherine-Carter, leads me to the horses.

I feed the young ones first, one carrot at a time, at first being worried about getting bit, but after awhile I don’t worry because now I am a professional horse feeder. I have an aptitude for feeding horses and my young cocky self knows it.

I make my way along stretching out my hand with a carrot in it and letting the horses snatch it up from my small hand. I love the way their tongues slides over my fingers as they pick up the carrot. Katherine-Carter watches as my little five year old self, goes along squealing and jumping through the stables. She laughs as one of the horses licks my face.

My sister comes into the stable and begins joining Katherine-Carter and I as we go from stable to stable feeding all the horses and forgetting about everything that has ever troubled us. My sister is jumpy and scared of the horses, she sometimes drops the carrot before the horse even gets. It is clear that she accepts mediocrity in the field of horse feeding.

There are only three horses left to feed; the first horse is a young purebred horse. He is jumpy and excited for feeding time; Katherine-Carter tells us to be careful because he is young and hasn’t learned the ropes of the ranch yet. We don’t care, we feed him as carelessly as any other horse and keep going along.

The second horse is an old quiet horse. Benjamin. He has a blindfold over his eyes to keep the bugs out. He is the most innocent horse anyone had ever seen; we could tell he was weak and that he had little time left. I reach my hand out to give him a carrot. Not paying attention I let my middle finger slide up. Not being able to see, he reaches his tongue out to find the carrot. The most immense pain I have ever felt shoots through my hand.

~ Malachy D.

7 comments:

  1. this is good!i like the details about the horses

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  2. I feel like I can actually see this happening. I really liked it.

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  3. That was really good! I like how you use foreshadowing getting bit by the horse by saying you are a professional horse feeder.

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  4. Really nice use of descriptive words to make it seem real

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  5. I really liked how you used foreshadowing.

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  6. I like how you never really state what happens to your hand, but the way you wrote the story really foreshadows what will happen.
    -Sebastian H.

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