Potomac's eighth grade English students read and discuss The House on Mango Street by Sandra Cisneros. The book is a series of short vignettes that together capture the characters, setting, and stories of a particular neighborhood in Chicago. The vignettes are written from the perspective of a fictional narrator and are based loosely on Cisneros's own experiences as well as those of her students. Some of the vignettes are humorous or action-packed; some are heart-wrenching or shocking. All are deliberate in their use of figurative language, poetic elements, grammar conventions, and pacing.

Each eighth grader composed at least one vignette for inclusion in this digital collection. They wrote in the style of Sandra Cisneros, as they interpreted it based on their notes and our class discussions, yet they set it in a time and place of their own choosing. While some of these vignettes are based on the author's personal experience, many of them are purely fiction, an imagining of characters and circumstances that seemed ripe for this assignment. Students also used this assignment to experiment with new vocabulary words and techniques involving punctuation and sentence structure.

We encourage you to leave comments below vignettes that strike you in some way. Please keep your comments positive and specific; this is not the place for critiques or suggestions. Enjoy the creativity and vibrancy of these students' literary efforts.

Thursday, December 17, 2015

Late Night Murder

We sit next to each other on the train, still pretending to be strangers. Casting dark clouds near it, the setting sun paints the sky of pink, purple, and orange. I sit on the plush red seat and lean on the cold window. Eyes droop … sun gone… I jolt awake. I check my watch. 7:03. Rain pours like little cannon balls, hitting the train with much impact. Great. Six to seven hours left for Maine. I look to my right inside the dimly lit train compartment. To my disappointment he is still up. Chris and I used to be two peas in a pod. So close we considered each other brothers. Until two weeks ago. It was just another adjunct to the case. Unnecessary. We were pertinacious to our own opinions. Fighting over who was right and wrong. We ended up losing the case. We were both suspended for a month. Anger reflected in his eyes. Both of our badges were taken away. I start saying Hello when a scream gets everyone’s attention. A lady in the back faints off her seat as she sees the dead body in behind her. It was a man in his mid 30’s with a suit and a suitcase. Phone in my hands I dial 911. No service. I immediately get up to take a closer look. Dark red blood oozes out of his mouth as if he were throwing up. I check for signs of wounds. Nothing. Poisoned. By whom? I check again. This time marks around the neck are visible. The killer must have an aptitude for killing because by the looks of it, this person failed choking his victim so has chosen another way of killing. When I go back to my seat Chris looks at me. He asks what was it? A dead body. Any evidence? Very few, the man was poisoned. Need help with the case? Nope. A tight feeling forms in my throat. I can sense the passengers’ fear. I fear too. An hour later another scream. Another body. More blood. Everyone stay calm! I exclaim, don’t panic this is being worked out. Immediately I scan the faces for any sign of satisfaction. I see a couple of faces that might match the killer's profile. Especially in the back. White male. Late 20’s. Simple T-shirt and jeans. There is something about his expression that piques my suspicion. Seeing me, he flees. I chase him. I catch him contemplating whether to jump off the train or not. Giving me a look of defeat he lets me handcuff him to a railing without commotion. I take the bag from under his seat and give them to Chris. I told you I could solve the case. Well done he replies. He asks for two glasses of champagne. A strange feeling nags at my stomach but I ignore it. We cheer and drink. I open the bag. Money. Stacks. No trace of poison. I look at Chris he replies with a smile. He says too bad, you were wrong, if only we both had enough time to make it to Maine alive. And we fall.

~ Kevin C.

7 comments:

  1. I like the plot and this vignette is very detailed, such as the verbs and adjectives you chose to use.

    John

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  2. I was not expecting that ending. I liked the plot twist. -HF

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  3. I like the small descriptive details in your story because it adds a depth of suspicion. -CE

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  4. That was really tense and descriptive. I could really see everything happening.
    -C.S.

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  5. That is an M. Night Shyamalan worthy twist. I'm still a bit confused as to who the murderer could have been, and I think that this is a great aspect of your vignette, it leaves you thinking.
    -L.O.

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  6. I really want to know who the killer is now. Great story though!
    - NG

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  7. This is very descriptive. I liked thriller feeling.

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